bornconfus3d
November 19, 2005
Content (39/40)
I started at the very begining of you diary here and I loved how you described your username. In this entry you describe your family, but not yourself. You told all about what your brothers are doing (one is living with you and one about to get married) and about your two sisters. The 15 year old (you said) "is a little 'ol me". So by reading that sentence I can conclude that you aren't the youngest, even though it sounds like it from the rest of that paragraph (you always feel in the shadow of them...that's normally what a younger sibling would say). Anyways, this left me wondering where you fell in the family line. Later one you said "I moved to this state in the last year." WHAT STATE?!?!
Oh wow, I just realized that your short description for all of your entries start out with "The one in which I discuss....". I really like that idea. Cretive; I've never seen that before.
I liked this entry because I feel the same way about rain. I love it. I sometimes wish it would rain every night when I go to bed...it helps me. I also learned that you are writing a novel. I think it would be awesome to write one, however some people (like me) just aren't meant to. Keep in mind that some people can be shy and not as outgoing as other individuals. God made them for that purpose, gave them that personality because He intends to use it to His glory. Some people have a different way of handling things, which is TOTALLY fine. It's the way they were wired. Not everyone is like you (and I have no idea if you're outgoing or not). Also, you seem to be very heavy on the standing out issue. So far I've read a lot about people trying to be themselves. What if they really are gothic or punk. Let them be that way. It's who they are. If you're a jeans and t-shirt girl, be that way...it's who you are. Maybe they're not trying to stand out...but because of the way they dress (and it's really who they are) tthey do stand out. I know some friends who aren't about to change the way they dress just for some other people who think they are trying to be such-and-such. So try looking at it from a different perspective. Yes, there are some people who do conform, but don't look at everyone as if they are. I don't think you would like that. I know I wouldn't appreciate it that much. Alright, before I step off my soap box, here's one more thing. It's okay to be normal. To not stand out. Those people are used in miraculous ways as well as the sparkly, outgoing people. No one can say "this personality is better than this one" because God made them both, and every perfect thing comes from Him.
Sometimes you have confusing sentences, like you left out a word or two. When that happens I can usually put in the word that was meant to be there, but other times I'm lefting wondering what you mean. Whenever I post an entry in my diary, I always read over it just to make sure it makes sense.
Wow, in this entry I wanted to be everything you said except for a nurse, actress, or a teacher. But other than that...those are my interests too. Wierd. That entry was a good one because a lot of people can relate to it. I really liked this one. This entry I could relate a lot to. About the support system part.
Alright, I'm sure that you've heard enough from this review, so I'm going to stop writting about your content and FINALLY give you the final overview and what I thought.
When I was reading your diary I saw a lot of entries that I could relate to. Many teenage girls have the same struggles as you do, and I feel as if your diary is very expressive of them. You write out your thoughts and your concerns very well. I felt as if I was feeling those entries too because they were so close to what I felt. Overall, I liked your diary because a lot of people can find common ground reading, and because of the way you would word things (except for those exceptions of words missing or gramatical errors).
Layout (18/20)
I'm not a big Harry Potter fan, but I definately love the layout. The background is gorgeous, and I love the colors. The fonts are nice and match the theme well. I love everything about it. However, I am going to have to take some points of because your archives do not match. I think it should be consistant.
Navigation (14.5/15)
Very nice. The one thing that bothers me is "the seer". I'm pretty sure that's not a word. It bugs me. But other than that, I like how it's all set up; looks very nice.
Link (5/5)
On the reviews page.
Extras (2/10)
You don't have any...? All you have are reviews listed. Not much for me to go on here.
Contact (2/10) Notes. Not very friendly I guess.
Favorites/Comments
Favorite Entries: The one in which I have no direction, The one where I wish I could trust people
Comments: I wish I could of given you a good score in the extras and contact sections, but I can't imagine things are there. Otherwise, your score would of been significantly higher. If you are going to request from a review site, you might want to check out what they are looking for in the future so you can be more prepared and add some stuff if need be.
Total: 80.5/100
Reviewer: Chaucee