princesse69
May 01, 2006
Once again, thank you so much for you patience with me and getting this review done. A guy came and had to clear my entire pc because I had some viruses and bad memory, so I forgot to tell him to save my notebook applications as well (which included your review). Bummer, because I was almost done with it too. Now we're back at square one.
Content (20/40) Let's look at the format at your writing. You do not have spaces between your paragraphs. That makes it harder to see where one idea ends and where another beings (because a paragraph typically consists of one idea or braches off of the idea in the previous paragraph). I remember seeing some entries that do have some paragraph breaks, and those are times of rejoycing! But to make your diary more presentable and easier to read (and when easier, more enjoyable to read) you need to make COMPLETE paragraph breaks.
You diary mostly consists of what you did that day and updates on your children and their cute little antics that children do. It is cute to hear their little doings day to day, but I find myself getting a little bit bored. I can't relate to your diary at all, probably because I don't have children OR a husband. Now if you wrote more about YOU and what YOU found in the day and what YOU learned recently and YOUR desires, wishes, hopes, fears, etc. then I would (probably) be able to relate to you better. I'm sure everyone would be able to relate to you better. Now I'm sure that the mothers on diaryland enjoy reading your diary about your children because THEY have children as well. But your diary is basically exclusive to only mothers. The rest of us won't be able to quite understand a mother's love for her child/children.
You diary will be great for keeping friends and relatives updated. Cute pictures too.
You don't update that requently, but enough. I understand that your life must be hectic, and I can't even believe that you have time to sit down and write in a diary, but I think this will be very valuable to you AND your children when they are older. My mother has 6 children and she never has time for herself, unless she plans it in advance. And then there is (of course) the whole planning the trip and such which causes more uneeded stress. So in the end she doesn't take that many vacations, and we all feel guilty because of it.
Haha, now that we know about my mom (which was not needed), let's move on to the layout.
Layout (9/20)
I don't like this layout at all. I never liked this series of layouts that Pink Design put out. I don't like the font color, I don't like the setup (it's too plain) and pink is just not for me. But it definately fits your diary. However, I really cringe when looking at the screen. I didn't have a good first impression of your diary (and that mostly comes from the layout, but there are some other factors like: have you written a novel ... punctuation, gramar...etc). Since you are asking for my opinion, then I will have to judge this accroding to my opinion.
Navigation (10/15)
I Don't like the font link. I don't like where the navigation bar is. All the links work. Hooray. I'm talking in fragments. Actually, typing. Apologies.
Link (5/5)
I had to wait a week or so before you put your link back up, but it's there now. So I guess I won't dock points for it not being there before.
Extras(2/10)
Well, you really only have one. And I ususally don't count that as a REAL extra. You have some webrings at the bottom of the page (at least I think that's what they are). Then at the bottom of the nav bar you have a mood little guy listed under the extras. Hate you break it too ya, but that's not an "extra". It's a mood.
Contact (7/10)
Notes, guestbook. Since you haven't been doing so hot in the review, I will give you a relatively good score here, just because I'm sympathetic ... and because you incorectly labeled your mood guy. Must have been a blonde moment. I don't even know if you're a blonde ... but it could work. And I don't mean that as insulting. I'm one of the TRUE blondes left in the world of bleach.
Favorites/Comments
Favorite(s): None
Comments: Write more about you. Still write about your children, but I want to hear more about your "journey of life". Silly, I know...but I couldn't come up with anything better. Feel free to substitute another phrase in relation to that idea.
Total: 53/100
Reviewer: Charmaine